Official X-3 Scenes: Fan Rewrites

[perfectstormx]

OMG that was perfect, did storm's eyes really go white when she spinned with wolvie in the movie?

[xmenlegend09]

Hey thanks guys for the comments and feedback. I know this probably makes my nerd-level on a all-time high, but I can't help it, I love X-Men so much...I just wish the movie would have lived up to its potential. But hey, we all can't get our way.
Anyways, I'm working on an extended version of the Battle at Alcatraz, I didn't realize it was so long, that and I did add Cyclops and Angel to the mix, so I have to write in their parts--and change the ending slightly to fit Cyclops.) Look out for it later tonight (hopefully).

And to answer your question perfectstormx...I don't believe they actually showed Storm's eyes turn white before she flew/spun to save Wolverine...but I assume her eyes had to inorder for her to spin like that.

[perfectstormx]

i think ur right, hey xmenrules can u make storm fight with callisto more, and add in a little arclight?

[The Weather God]

You guy's and gal's have did a tremendus job on these rewites, i must admit that this movie would have been alot better with you all's point of view

[perfectstormx]

MORE!!! LOL

[xmenlegend09]

Note: Multiple Man is on the island--I wouldn't have even included that scene in the movie where het get's caught.
Psylocke is on her mission inside the building to get Angel's father from the re-write WeatherGoddess made.
Also, what seems like might be a long fight scene is really a bunch of things happening at the same time, but since you can only focus one thing it looks longer--especially if you're reading text.
Also, I know there is a lot of comic relief in the battle, but I figure with the ending being so intense and emotional, it's okay.

Attack on Alcatraz and Battle for the Cure

The X-Men flying in the X-Jet over the San Francisco Bay are shocked by the damage Magneto has done by moving the Golden Gate Bridge.
As they spectate only one thing can be said to comment on what has happened...
Beast: "Oh my stars and garters."
Storm clicks the button on top of the operating panel.
Storm: "Going into stealth mode."
The X-Jet blends into the night sky (and somehow the exhuast disappears too.)
As the morlocks begin to charge the soldiers again, the sky gets darker and flashes of lightning appear. Magneto, Pyro, Callisto, Arclight, Quill, MultipleMan, and Juggernaut look up into the sky. The X-Jet surrounded by fog lands on top of the building's roof. The camera looks down on the island showing the brotherhood members and morlocks and lightning bolts begin to strike the ground. Zap! Zap! Zap! Storm comes flying out from the top-right corner. Her hands straight out in front her, one knee up, and her cape flapping behind her (just like cartoon). She uses her hands as lighting rods aiming a barrage of lighting bolts at the morlocks. Some are zapped while others take cover. The camera looks at the roof of the buliding again:
Beast jumps off practically flying, landing on the ground below.
Cyclops jumps off, aiming his laser down into the ground, slowing his descent.
Angel follows and does a diving swoop to the ground.
Shadowcat and Iceman jump off togther plunging straight into the ground.
Colossus jumps off unsteeled, he is then shown landing all steeled up creating a crater in the ground.
Shadowcat and Iceman pop out of the ground.
Iceman: "...Don't ever do that again."
Wolverine is last and jumps off in the corner of the building very stylishly, with his arms crossed in front of him and one knee up. As he descends he opens his arms and slows his fall as his claws slide down the building. He lands and runs to his place in line. Wolverine yells to the soldiers.
Wolverine: "You guys, cover that area! Don't let anyone in the building!"
Storm grints her teeth and gives one last barrage of lightning bolts as her eyes glow pure white and spark electricity. Seeing that the morlocks took cover she stops and finally lands. The X-Men stand in a horizontal line. From the back to front it goes: Angel, Beast, Wolverine, Storm, Cyclops, Shadowcat, Iceman, and Colossus.
Cyclops: "Everybody hold this line."
ShadowCat nods her head and then a close up of every X-Man is showing, breathing hard as their breath is shown in the cold night. Storm hair blows in the air. Cyclops looks up at Jean, but she looks back unemotionally. Wolverine closes his fist and 3 claws petrude out. Magneto looks at X-Men with a look of disgust.

Magneto: "Traitors to their own kind...FINISH THEM!!!"
Beast: "ROAR!!!"
Instantly the morlocks come out of their cover and charge the X-Men. The X-Men brace themselves for the charge. Wolverine slices down a lamp post and it falls on 2 morlocks. Cyclops begins to blast away! The morlocks hit by the the strong concussive force of Cyclops's blast fly back. Beast roars and jumps onto a light post, swinging 270 degrees as he kicks a couple morlocks down. He let's go and his body still spins around hitting more morlocks. As Beast hits the ground he spins around on his back, tripping the morlocks around him. Wolverine takes 1 morlock after another, injurying or killing them with one hit. Storm flies straight up but is blind-sighted by a morlock who extends his arm up in the air to grab her before she can do anything. He pulls her to him and she sends a bolt of lighting right to him. But it does not work. He looks at her and smiles.
Morlock 1: "You fool, I'm rubber!"
Still in his grasp, Storm turns herself into a cyclone and begins to spin. They begin to move in a path as Storm sends lightning bolts down hitting other morlocks as they pass them by. 4 Morlocks charge at Iceman, he creates an icewall and they run smashing into it. Storm and the rubber mutant pass by Iceman and Storm stops spinning. The rubber morlock is so dizzy he doesn't realize where he's positioned.
Storm: "Bobby!!!"
Iceman turns around and sends a blast of ice to them directly hitting the morlock. The mocklock becomes frozen. Storm sends another bolt of lightning down on the morlock, shattering his frozen rubber body into many pieces. Pyro seeing what Iceman has just done, starts to go after him, but Magneto holds him back.
Magneto: "Not yet."
Although not wanting to stop, Pyro listens to his leader. Storm thankfully nods quickly to Iceman and flys up again. Callisto angry at what she has just seen uses her speed to get to the top of the building. She jumps off and onto Storm sending Storm back down the ground.
Colossus uppercuts one morlock sending him flying up into the air and punches another two.
One morlock with demon-eyes charges for ShadowCat she phases through him, turns around, grabs his shoulders and slams him into the ground.
Angel swoops down grabs a morlock and throws him into another.
Wolverine continues to slice morlock after morlock. One comes up and Wolverine cuts off his arm. It grows back and the morlock punches Wolverine in the face. Wolverine goes for the other arm, it grows back and Wolverine get's punched again. Wolverine goes back for the other arm one more time and same thing happens. The morlock puts up his fists.
Morlock 2: "Come on!"
Wolverine puts down his fists, retracts his claws and turns away, only to unexpectingly kick the morlock in his groin.
Morlock 2: "Ughh!"
Wolverine: "Grow those back."

Cyclops continues to fire his beams at morlocks as he tries to make his way towards Jean.
Storm and Callisto's fight continues on. Callisto uses her speed as an advantage and delivers multiple blows to Storm. Punch after punch, kick after kick, Callisto practically dances around Storm. Storm though not taking this any longer anticipates Callisto's next move. She sticks out her arm and Callisto runs right into her fist knocking herself on the ground. Storm looks down at Callisto.
Magneto and the brotherhood members are still atop of the bridge. Magneto nods to Multiple Man, Arclight, and Quill.
Cyclops tries to get closer to Jean.
Cyclops: "Jean!"
Suddenly, a shockwave is fired in Cyclops' direction. Cyclops goes flying back. Arclight, MultipleMan,and Quill walk down to the battlefied. Arclight fires another at Angel flying in the air. He gets hit and goes crashing into the ground in front of a group of soldiers. Cyclops gets up and Arclight fires another shockwave at Cyclops, he dives flat on the gound, ducking below the wave and counters with a blast of his own. Arclight gets hit and flies back into the ground.
Multiple Man makes about 30 copies of himself and surround Wolverine, Iceman, Beast, Cyclops, ShadowCat, and Colossus. Quill helps Arclight up while Multiple Man distracts the X-Men and they head for the building. Quill shoots his quills at the soldiers blocking the entrance and him and Arclight go into the building.

Storm and Callisto continue on fighting. Grabbing each other by the neck.
Callisto: "Traitor!"
Storm: "Do you even know what you're fighting for?!"
Callisto: "Mutants! Unlike you, I'm proud of being one!"
Storm: "You don't see me taking the cure!"
Callisto: 'I don't see you stopping it either!"
Storm: "You wanna kill a child--a mutant child!"
Callisto: "We have to make sacrafices!"
Storm: "Well, he's not going to be one--and neither am I!"
Callisto: "We'll see about that!"
Callisto picks up dirt and throws it any Storm's eyes. She then kicks Storm and continues to beat on her.

The X-Men begin to attack the multiple's of Multiple Man. Each time they attack a multiple it dereplicates. They can't find the real one. The multiples team up on the X-men. They grab debris or anything on the ground that can be used as weapons against the 6 X-Men.
Wolverine: "I thought you were a diplomat?!"
Beast: "As [some author] wrote, there's comes a time when everyone must--"
Beast is interuppted by multiples and deals with them.
Beast: "Ohh, you get the point! Roarrr!"
Magneto looks at Juggernaut.
Magneto: "Go in, find the boy--KILL HIM."
Juggernaut: "With pleasure."
Juggernaut takes off running, gaining momentum with each step. He pile drives through several soldiers trying to hold him off. He knocks and flips them over like bowling pins. He jumps onto a truck, crushing it and jumps into the building puncturing a giant whole in the wall as he does so.
Beast: "He's going after the boy!"
ShadowCat: "Not if I get their first!"
Colossus: "Kitty!"
She runs through the multiples in her way and phases into the building as the other X-Men fend off the multiples.

Stomp! Stomp! Stomp! Juggernaut makes his way through the building. Kitty phases through and runs toward Juggernaut. She makes a giant leap for Juggernaut.
ShadowCat: "Hughhhh!"
ShadowCat grabs Juggernaut and phases him into the ground. Juggernaut confused to what is happening looks down as he is sunk halfway into the ground. Kitty comes up out of the ground with a smirk on her face. Juggernaut looks up at her.
Juggernaut: "Don't you know who I am?"
Kitty runs away to get Leech.
Juggernaut: "I'm the Juggernaut, b!tch!"
He busts his way through the cement floor, jumps up and chases after Kitty. Phase. BLAST! Phase. BLAST! Kitty runs phasing through each wall she comes to as Juggernaut chases her blasting through each one. After phasing through another wall, Kitty stops running and hides in the corner. Blast! Juggernaut blasts right through and keeps on running.
Kitty goes a different direction. Juggernaut busts through the next wall only to realize he's not chasing Kitty anymore. He stops turns around and slams his fists together.

Outside, the X-Men continue to fight the multiples.
Wolverine: "Hold on! Regroup!"
The X-Men back into a circle.
Wolverine: "Colossus, we can handle this. Go after Kitty!"
Colossus rams his way through several multiples to follow after Kitty. Wolverine, Cyclops, Beast, and Iceman are now surrounded by the multiples.
Kitty phases through one more wall phasing into Leech's room. She looks around to see him hiding behind his dresser. She runs over to him. He covers his face and resists her.
ShadowCat: "No, no, I'm here to help you."
She helps him up.
ShadowCat: "We gotta get out of here."
She takes his hand and runs for the wall. Bam! She can't phase t through.
ShadowCat: "Oh my God, what's going on?"
Leech: "Your powers won't work me."
'Stomp!' ShadowCat looks shocked at what Leech had just said. 'Stomp!'
ShadowCat: "Stay close."
Leech nods his head. 'Stomp!' BLAST! Juggernaut comes in.
Juggernaut: "I'm the wrong guy to play hide and seek with."
ShadowCat: "Who's hiding, d!ckhead."
Juggernaut: "Rarghhhhh!"
Juggernaut charges at them, ShadowCat and Leech evade his charge and he rams into the wall, knocking himself over. He grabs his head and begins to get up.
ShadowCat: "Let's go!"
Juggernaut: "Arghh, get back here!"
ShadowCat and Leech run the way Juggernaut came in. Juggernaut gets up. ShadowCat and Leech run by Colossus.
Colossus: "Kitty!"
ShadowCat: "Pete! He's right behind us!"
Colossus: "Keep goin!"
ShadowCat nods her head and continues to run. Colossus steels up. As Juggernaut runs into where Colossus is, Juggernaut is greeted to a mightly blow to the face by Colossus's fist. Juggernaut stumbles.
Juggernaut: "Ehh, you piece of scrap metal!"
One fist after another, Juggernaut and Colossus duke it out. With each punch the other goes stumbling back. ShadowCat and Leech are halfway out of the building when ShadowCat stops.
ShadowCat: "Wait here, I'll be right back, I promise."
ShadowCat runs back in Colossus's direction.
Juggernaut charges at Colossus, flipping Colossus up and onto Juggernaut's back. He runs and slams Colossus into the wall. He picks up Colossus, spins around and then throws him into the back wall. Colossus weakened, de-steels, and slowly gets up. Juggernaut walks to where Colossus is.
Kitty phases from behind Colossus, out of sight from the Juggernaut.
ShadowCat whispers: "Pete. Don't move."
Juggernaut: "I'm-Un-Stoppable!!!"
Colossus: "You're ugly!"
Juggernaut: "Rarghhh!"
Juggernaut rams at Colossus only to go right through him and bust through the wall, falling off Alcatraz.
Juggernaut: "Arghhhhhhhhhhh!"
Juggernaut falls straight into the San Francisco Bay. Colossus and ShadowCat give sighs of relief.

Wolverine sniffs around to find out which multiple is real. He' senses the scent, he knows which one is the real Multiple Man.
Wolverine (sarcastically): "Hey Scott! You wanna do lunch at 12 o'clock?"
Cyclops: "Logan! Wha--?
Wolverine gives Scott 'a look.'
Cyclops understands and unleashes a poweful blast right to his 12 o'clock sending MultipleMan off the island as his multiples de-replicate back into him.

Callisto begins to run around Storm with superspeed, going in to hit Storm every few cycles. Storm tries to physcially counter Callisto, but it doesn't work, she is too fast. Storm realizes this and sends a whirlwind around her. The gust lifts Callisto up, stopping her superspeed and throws her into the electricity box and metal fence.
Callisto: "Ugh!"
Storm: "Sacrafices."
Storm puts out her hands and sends lightning right on Callisto overcharging everything. Zap! Zap! Zap! Storm stops and Callisto is fried. Her chin ring lights up. Magneto has had enough and gives off a pissed look.
Magneto: "Hmph, time to end this."

End of Part I Scene.

[perfectstormx]

OMG OMG, that was the best thing ever!!! MORE!!! lol.. i hope fox and brett ratner see this and see what they should of done!!! heheh... i wish storm and callisto had the convo when they were fighting!!

[pyro]

i loved the colossus and juggernaut battle that would have been awsome in the movie. your re-writes are great!

[perfectstormx]

yes agree! MORE!!!! LOL!! ;D

[live4laughs]

the main thing i would rewrite in x3 is the scene where it leads to jean destroying everything
the music there should have been done differently when the army guys shoot and when shes standing on that hill with the ire everywhere logan should have said " u have to stop jean" and then her saying "jean? i am PHOENIX!" then she manipulates the fire and glowing ashes to form a bird around her and releases a wave of force stripping off some skin off logan

[xmenlegend09]

Teamwork

Magneto: "Hmph, time to end this."
Magneto lifts his arms out in front of him. He cups his hands up. Behind him two cars lift up into the air. Pyro puts his hands out getting ready to use his new devices. Magneto flips his hands around and the 2 cars are thrown intot the air. Pyro aims his arms up and sends a stream of fire towards the cars and they basically become bombs. Exploding as they hit the ground near the X-Men and soldiers. Magneto and Pyro continue their teamwork. One car heads right for Beast, but the agile mutant leaps away just in time.
Wolverine: "Everybody take cover!"
Cyclops stays there looking at Jean.
Cyclops: "Jean!"
Wolverine: "Scott come on!"
Cyclops: "I'm not gonna run away."
Wolverine: "We can't get to her like this!"
A flaming car comes heading Scott's way. He shoots his laser at the incoming car and it breaks the car into two pieces still headin in Scott's direction. He fallsback and takes cover as the flaming divided car lands where he was standing. A car hits the a lookout tower and it explodes. Iceman, Beast, Wolverine, Cyclops, and Storm all take cover. Colossus, Shadowcat, and Leech come out of the building in shock at what is happening. A car comes flying towards the building. It lands and explodes near a group of soldiers, scared the soldiers leap out of way. As one of the soldier's hits the ground he as a reaction pushes the trigger on his cure gun firing it to an unaware Colossus, ShadowCat, and Leech. Leech feels something puncture his shoulder. He looks and pulls it out of his shoulder, then looks to see if Colossus or Shadowcat noticed. They didn't. He throws the cure dart on the ground, not knowing if it as affected him or not.
Colossus: "You guys take cover over there!" pointing to around the corner of the building.
Shadowcat and Leech run over there as Colossus joins the other X-Men taking cover. Storm runs closer to Wolverine and crouches behind cover just as she did in the Danger Room session.

Wolverine: "What do we do? We can't get close."
Storm: "We're gonna have to stop him...without him expecting it."
Cyclops: "We gotta hurry."
Wolverine looks at the ground at a cure cartridge. Beast, Cyclops, and Storm look at it. Beast nods his head. Wolverine looks at Storm.
Wolverine: "We work as a team."
Storm: "Best defense is a good offense."
Wolverine: "Hey, Iceman do you think you can take of your ol' friend?"
Iceman nods his head and runs out from cover. A flaming car heads for him. He puts his hands in the air, freezing the car and it drops straight to the ground. Pyro looks at Iceman.
Magneto: "Go on..."
Pyro walks down to meet Iceman.

Wolverine: "Storm, we're gonna need--"
Storm: "On it."
Storm looks up into the night sky. Her eyes turn white and a fog begins to swallow the island.

Pyro and Iceman meet face to face.
Pyro: "'Bout time."
Iceman looks at Pyro finally fed up with him. Pyro gives a dirty look. Right then, his igniter on his arm ignites and he sends a flame directly to Iceman. Iceman counters with a blast of ice. Powerful streams of ice and fire seperate the two rivals. Pyro uses his other hand and manipulates a fireball and throws it at Iceman while he continues his stream of fire with the other hand. Iceman caught off guard gets hit and falls on his back to the ground. Pyro stops his stream of fire and begins to walk closer to Iceman.
Pyro: "You're pathetic! You and the rest of the X-b!tches!" "Ungh!"
Pyro sends his stream of fire out again and continues walking. Iceman puts one hand out and shoots his ice blast countering the fire. He puts his other on the ground and makes an ice path on the ground towards Pyro's feet. Pyro, walking, slips on the ice and falls back. Iceman gets up.
Iceman: "You always did have a big mouth."
Pyro smirks. Iceman puts his arm out to shoot again, but Pyro quickly shoots out his fire, manipulating it so circles around Iceman. A vortex of fire suddenly surrounds Iceman. Through the fire vortex, all Pyro can see is a silohuette of Iceman burning up.
Pyro: "How do you like it Bobby!"
When Pyro doesn't hear Bobby respond he stops the vortex of fire thinking that he has finished the job. As the vortex lifts up, it reveals a statue of ice slowly melting, Iceman not in sight.
Pyro: "What the?"
A baseball-sized ice ball is thrownm hitting Pyro directly in the head. Iceman comes out of hiding. He had created a statue of ice in the vortex escaping it. Pyro pissed off sends a powerful stream of fire right at Iceman. Iceman counters with his ice. Slowly Iceman's stream of ice gets shorter. Pyro keeps his fire coming. Iceman crouches to the ground, both hands up as he tries to keep the fire away from him, but it is no use. Pyro get's closer to Iceman until he is standing right next to him. Iceman becomes covered with flames, overwhelmed with Pyro's power.
Pyro: "What did I tell you Bobby...pathetic. Maybe you should go back to school."
As the flames contine to devour Iceman, something happens to Iceman. His skin becomes crystallized with ice and his whole body looks as if its been turned into pure organic ice. Iceman grabs Pyro's wrists, freezing the contraptions on his arms. Iceman stands up, quickly punches Pyro in the stomach two times and forcefully headbutts him.
Iceman: "...You never should have left."
Pyro falls to the ground knocked out and Iceman retreats back.



Magneto looks out through the fog. To Magneto's left in the distance Cyclops awaits, in front of Magneto, Wolverine and Colossus await. Cyclops fires a beam hitting the ground in next to Magneto. Magneto looks in his direction. Colossus grabs Wolverine.
Wolverine: "Hey. Make it a strike."
Colossus takes Wolverine, spins him and throws him. Magneto looks ahead and stops Wolverine's flight, slamming him into the ground. Magneto flips him over.
Magneto: "Don't you ever learn?
Wolverine: "Actually, I do."
Suddenly, Beast jumps out of the fog behind Magneto and delivers the cure darts straight to his chest.
Magneto: "GASP!!!...No, I'm...
Wolverine: "One of them"
Beast goes over and stands next to Wolverine. Magneto falls to the ground and takes out the cure darts. He slowly turns to Jean.
Magneto: "This is what they want for you my dear."
Wolverine: "Shut it."
Cyclops runs over to them and Storm runs over as well. Wolverine looks at Jean.
Wolverine: "It's over Jean, it's over."
Cyclops: "Come home."
Suddenly!!! Ground soliders appear atop the bridge.
Soldiers: "Freeze mutant!"
Wolverine and Cyclops: "NOOOOOO!!!"
Soldiers: "Fire!!!"
A plethora of cure darts are fired directly at Jean.

End of Part II Scene.

(Stay tuned for the spectacular and RIGHT ending.)

[perfectstormx]

YAY!!!^^^^OOO it sounds good!!!

[storm15]

i like them they are very good

[perfectstormx]

ohh, i can't wait for part II, the "right way" does that mean storm vs. dark phoenix?? lol

[pyro]

dude that rocked! i cant wait for part II

[perfectstormx]

^^ i can't wait for part II either!!! come on xmenlegand09!! LOL!

[xmenlegend09]

Part III you mean. Haha, yeah I'm workin on it. Thanks for the feedback.

And for those hoping for Storm verus Dark Phoenix--haven't you had enough fighting? LOL.j/k. Well, I don't wanna get your hopes up, but sorry its not gonna be there. The ending is gonna be more/less like the movie ending, but better. Besides, Storm had her time with Callisto (2 times), now its time for Cyclops and Jean's love to shine like how it should have.

[xmenfan32]

where is the weather goddess?? we haven't heard from her for a while. i really like the other ones too but i really want one where jean and storm fight. i think that we would frickin awesome and i love how the weather goddess writes her stories. especially the psylocke one. it was AWESOME!!!!!so someone please write one where phoenix and storm have a showdown. PLEASE!!!!!!!!!11

[adventangel2232]

Nice rewrites Xmenlegend. I especially enjoyed your rendition of the final battle, more epic and more time to show just how much the Xmen power the Xmen possess. I like the action that you put in. The only thing that I didnt like was how Angel was knocked out so easily. you killed my favorite character!!, jk lol.

[perfectstormx]

xmenfan32 said:

where is the weather goddess?? we haven't heard from her for a while. i really like the other ones too but i really want one where jean and storm fight. i think that we would frickin awesome and i love how the weather goddess writes her stories. especially the psylocke one. it was AWESOME!!!!!so someone please write one where phoenix and storm have a showdown. PLEASE!!!!!!!!!11

YES!!!! please weather goddess come back to UR thread!! LOL! ;D