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Post by cannonball on Jul 15, 2006 11:07:01 GMT -5
Wolverine: Jean don't do this, we can help u.
Phoenix: Jean isn't here anymore.
jean: kill me it's the only way.
wolverine:there has to be another way, the cure.
jean: no i would rather die.
wolverine:but.......what about the mansion.
phoenix: enough! you will all die
-phoenix rises into the air her eyes turn black and skin turns gray she lands on the next rock and the earth begins to slowly demolocule,wolverine trys to get to where jean is but she keeps demoloculing him but he keeps healing and is slowing him down.......finally he gets to her and she says with an evil voice" you will die for them" then wolverine says "not for them, for you" then her eyes and skin goes back to normal and he says "jean" then she replies "logan" as tears fall down both of there eyes the she turns back into to phoenix with an evil smirk and lifts him up and throws across the island. Storm: "screams logan" then her eyes turn white and sends multiple electric bolts at phoenix but only one hits her sending her back but stops her self in mid-air and starts to send mental sockwaves at stom but in the nick of time raises in to the air on wind Storm: "screams stop this we all can help theres alwas a way" phoenix replies"I dont want another way" then out of no where wolverine comes flying out of no where performing the fast-ball speical with the aid of fellow xmen colosuss he stabs phoenix in the in the chest but befor she dies she says "thank you".Then wolverine sreams no...............!!
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Post by windsurfer8290 on Jul 15, 2006 12:19:04 GMT -5
i like it
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Post by Kunkryst on Jul 15, 2006 12:33:45 GMT -5
Why Phoenix have gray skin ?
Give her skin some kind of fiery shine.
Something like tea would fit.
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Post by perfectstormx on Jul 15, 2006 12:34:46 GMT -5
that's pretty good
xmenlegend09- read my previous posts on the storm and logan love scene. lol!
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Post by ntcrawler on Jul 21, 2006 16:10:37 GMT -5
And here's another contribution from me. Things have been busy and there's a whole mess of scenes we're putting together that are also going to be converted into 2, 2-part fanfics. One a rewrite, one a completely fresh look at X3 and X4. But for now, for your viewing pleasure:
A stronger, more mature Rogue:
Assumpsions: Rogue took part in the Alcatraz battle. Logan convinced her to avoid Cure until after battle. Afterwards ran off to take the Cure
Scene: Rogue finds Bobby at the mansion towards the end of X3
Bobby is in his room. Hears knock on door, opens door, enter Marie. Bobby is surprised to see her. Her hands are bare.
Bobby:
Marie?
Marie:
Hello Bobby
Marie takes his hand. Bobby flinches at first, until he realizes that nothing happens. Realizes what this means and looks her in the eye
Bobby:
Marie, this isn't what I wanted
Marie:
Bobby, it's what I wanted
Bobby looks down, face disappointed, sighs slowly in resignation.
Bobby:
I wish you would have reconsidered.
Marie smiles at him sweetly and shakes her head
Marie:
It's not what you think, sugah
Bobby:
What?
Marie:
I didn't take the Cure
Bobby's expression turns into shock and disbelief. Eyes wide, but still lets Marie hold his hand
Bobby:
But... HOW?
Marie:
I learned to control it better. Found a way to hold it back a bit
Bobby is still surprised, lifts her hand up with his and looks at it than with her
Bobby:
I thought you had given up
Marie:
I was going to, but a certain someone changed mah mind
Bobby:
How can you do this this? I thought-
Marie:
It's sort-of like holding your breath. I can do it, just not too long.
Bobby:
How long?
Marie reaches up to him slowly, her face close to his, turns it slightly and moves to kiss him.
Marie:
Long enough...
They kiss gently
END SCENE
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Post by ntcrawler on Jul 21, 2006 16:14:28 GMT -5
Haha, so I'm wondering, what would you guys had rather seen a Wolverine-Storm love scene or keep the Wolverine-Jean love scene. I think to include both would be too much. Only reason I like the Wolvie-Jean one is because I like the transition of her going from evil sensual physical contact-fiend to "kill me". It's also kind of funny having Jean seduct Wolverine (the belt-buckle was priceless), but then again it's out of place because it should be Cyclops and Jean's love story. And I have a feeling Wolverine and Storm's scene could be even hotter--just look at Monster's Ball haha.  I don't have a problem with a steamy scene between Jean and Logan. If anything that helps drive the point home that there is something seriously seriously wrong with Jean. Even Logan would know that. He even realizes this in X2. He knows that when Jean willingly throws herself at him it means either it must be an imposter like Mystique or there's something seirously wrong. That would be a good way to play it up. Of course towards the big climax at the end we all know it's Scott's rightful place to be the one who saves her, and not Logan. And I am adamant when I say "save her", not "kill her". Scott would best know the difference between the two and how to appeal to Jean. |
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Post by powerfulwizard8888 on Jul 22, 2006 7:39:15 GMT -5
More rewrites!!! Come on guys!!! xmenlegend go go go!!!
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Post by perfectstormx on Jul 22, 2006 7:57:33 GMT -5
haha! i agree!
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Post by Psylocke 4 ever on Jul 22, 2006 17:42:47 GMT -5
look out for mine soon its a rogue one lol
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Post by perfectstormx on Jul 22, 2006 20:49:10 GMT -5
lol! where is xmenlegend09??!!! ok that's it it's time to take a stand! i shall write one of rolo!!! lol  |
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Post by Psylocke 4 ever on Jul 23, 2006 7:32:28 GMT -5
Juggernaut smashes through the wall of Leech’s room where Kitty stood with Leech pondering her next move. “I’m the wrong guy to play hide and seek with,” said Juggernaut angrily. “Who’s hiding dickhead,” responded Kitty. “Arrggghhhhhhhhh,” Juggernaut roared, charging after Kitty and Leech. Then they tried to move out of the way, but Juggernaut swung his arm blocking them against the wall. “Now where were we?” he said, with a mischievous smile on his face. “I won’t let you hurt him,” said Kitty. “You’re a brave little X-girl aren’t you?” said Juggernaut sarcastically, as he stood in front of them. “But do you know who I am?” “We’ve already been through this,” said Kitty rudely. Then Juggernaut started sniggering loudly. Then he grabbed her by the neck and lifted her up and said, “I’m gonna enjoy killing you, and your little friend too.” “Please leave her alone it’s me you want,” said a brave Leech, trying to reason with Juggernaut. “It will be your turn soon cure-boy don’t you worry,” said Juggernaut evilly. “This will only take a minute.” “Get off me,” said Kitty trying to speak, but couldn’t speak properly as Juggernaut was clutching on to her neck. “You’re gonna wish you didn’t mess with me,” said Juggernaut, squeezing harder. “Nooooo,” shouted Leech. “Let her go,” said a voice coming from behind them. Then Juggernaut turned his head slightly to see………………………………………………………….......................................
A girl whose power she didn’t ask for, a calling she didn’t choose a destiny only she could decide. She goes by the name of Rogue. She was standing there wearing her black figure hugging X-suit. “And you are?” Juggernaut asked nastily. “I’m an X-man,” said Rogue walking towards him slowly. “And I won’t let you harm them.” Then Juggernaut dropped Kitty and turned round to face Rogue. “What is it, super-girl day or something?” joked Juggernaut, as Leech ran to Kitty’s aid. “Rogue get out of here and get help,” said Kitty, trying to catch her breath. “No Kitty, this is our fight,” said Rogue correcting her.” I don’t have time for this *****,” said Juggernaut. Then he whacked Rogue with his hand and she went flying back through the hole. “One down two to go,” said Juggernaut, turning back round. “Please don’t hurt us,” said Leech. “Give me one good reason why?” Juggernaut asked. “Err…” Leech said hesitating. “You’re the cure they say, well think of me as a virus, and I’m here to put a stop to you,” said Juggernaut. Outside Rogue was lying on the floor looking badly hurt as she gained consciousness. “I have to do this,” she said to herself with determination. But what was Rogue talking about? What did she have to do? Back inside leech’s room Juggernaut had just lifted Kitty and Leech up in each hand and said, “At least you’ll die together……………slowly.” Then a limping Rogue came into the room. “Let them go,” said Rogue. But Juggernaut just ignored her and carried on slowly squeezing Kitty and Leech’s windpipes. Then as Rogue stood a few feet away from Juggernaut she collapsed on the floor. “Stupid girl, I’ll deal with you after,” said Juggernaut referring to Rogue. Then Rogue gripped her now gloveless hands around Juggernaut’s legs and started to drain his powers. The veins that were already popping out of his body started to get even bigger. “What the hell?” said Juggernaut, dropping Kitty and Leech. “What are you doing to me?” But Rogue didn’t respond she kept her hands glued to his legs. Then he shoved his foot in her face to make her let go. “I feel weird,” said Juggernaut, stumbling as he turned to Rogue. “It’s like you, you drained me.” Then Rogue stood up looking as if she had just been reenergized. Then she looked at her hands in amazement, and saw her veins which were popping out, starting to go back to normal. “I’m going to kill you,” snapped Juggernaut, staggering towards her. Then he went to grab her by the neck but Rogue caught his arm before he could. “What?” said Juggernaut, not believing his eyes. Then Rogue smiled at him and said, “This will teach you not to mess with the X-men.” And with that she grabbed hold of his crouch, lifted him above her head and started to spin him around, and then she threw him through the wall making another hole. “Kitty, Leech you guys ok?” asked Rogue, running towards them. “How, how did you do that Rogue?” asked Kitty, as Rogue helped them both up. “I took his power of super-strength, it was the only way to save you guys,” said Rogue. “Thanks,” said Leech. Then Rogue smiled at him. “I thought you went to take the cure,” said Kitty. Then Rogue paused for a moment before she replied, “I was gonna but I figured this is me now, this is who I am, who I’m meant to be, a mutant, an X-man. I couldn’t have just got rid of it; it would be like getting rid of a part of me.” “I’m sorry Rogue about everything. Bobby and I we didn’t mean…” “Don’t worry Kitty lets just get out of here, the others need our help.” Then Kitty hugged Rogue. “Ok let’s go,” said Kitty, and they all started walking out of the room.
I know its great innt, my favourite part is where Rogue talks bout being a mutant at the end. So guys tell me your honest opinions. I also think this is the longest re-write we’ve had.
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Post by perfectstormx on Jul 23, 2006 11:16:20 GMT -5
Whoa that's some awesome stuff jarat now it's time for the PSinator rewrite:
The Last Stand
(The part where X-Men are in line)
Logan: 'Ro! Get up there and and make sure you make Magneto's troops never know what hit them.
::Storm looks up to the sky and with a lift from a breeze she flies up to the sky, the clouds start to darken and all eyes are on Ororo up in the sky producing a massive storm surge, gathering moisture from the San Fransico Bay. The winds start to pound into the heart of the attackers. Then immediatly she flies down bringing a huge gust of wind knocking some attackers of their feet and the rest too dazed with the tidal wave that followed, then with the attackers down, Ororo zipped through pounding some of them physically and flips and then goes up to the sky again. Only this time Callisto seized the moment scrabling up one of the suspender cables of the bridge and made a leap for Storm and the two tumbled to the ground. Then continues with Storm and Callisto fighting, etc. [/B]
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Post by takeru91 on Jul 24, 2006 20:04:39 GMT -5
Wow~ You guys should do the whole movie again haha I really like the one jarat wrote with rouge coming back but she wouldn't have been able to absorb him with leech being a few feet away from her.. and it would have been cool if rouge grabbed leech's hand and pulled him up^^
but i still like it better than juggernaut crashing into the wall and passing out.. it makes him look pathetic..
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Post by Psylocke 4 ever on Jul 25, 2006 7:59:23 GMT -5
i never thought of that, but in my defence i'd say leech's and rogues powers cancel ecah other out so neither have an affect. im glad u like it though, keep your comments coming.
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Post by powerfulwizard8888 on Jul 25, 2006 8:26:01 GMT -5
Go perfectsotrmx Do another one!!! Where are xmenlegendo9 and the one who made this forum Do some more!!!
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Post by perfectstormx on Jul 25, 2006 9:25:03 GMT -5
oh goody, me have fans, i think i will indeed write another one, stay tuned  |
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Post by phoenixreborn2 on Jul 25, 2006 10:10:09 GMT -5
every one gets better and better xmenlegend09!!!!!!!!!!
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Post by perfectstormx on Jul 25, 2006 10:11:07 GMT -5
yeah, my next re-write will be a face off against magneto and storm
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Post by Phoenix~Gal on Jul 25, 2006 19:20:53 GMT -5
Here's one of my re-write's.
Storm: You know magneto is going to go get mistique.
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Storm: Youknow magneto is going to go fetch his ***** right.
And
Logan: I cant see a damn thing.
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Logan: Storm fix it the audience cant see me.
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Post by Psylocke 4 ever on Jul 25, 2006 19:29:06 GMT -5
is that it lol. add more
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